Ah man the consistency with the message and whomesomeness with these so far... on point. Regarding structure I wouldn't mind a more poetry-based style of speech with this, it goes well with the format I think, if you want to opt for rap entirely it might help to try to keep a consistent/similar amount of syllables with each line, that's generally how you can manage to keep a flow that's also consistent. Either way though so far these are pretty inspiring...
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yeah you are right that i am more experienced on poetry than
rap but not much people like lisening to poetry rap is kinda more fun in that way
Hell yeah! :D Great message. Seems like articulating everything in English might be the big challenge for you though, the writing's great, the pace too, though seems you get stuck on certain syllables/pronunciations a bit along the way. Curious if you tried multiple times on this? Is this the first take entirely? When I do these I usually end up recording around anywhere from 3-20 times on each one, sometimes more depending on how complex the structure is, it's not easy to get it right away even if you're used to the language, and I feel at least a few takes works as warm up, so your tone gets a bit deeper and more prominent too. Sometimes. Sometimes it doesn't work anyway! Just gotta put out what you have regardless then... of course there's something special about it really being the one and only if that's what you're going for! As real as it gets.
But this is what it's all about! Really cool to hear you jumped on this, and especially when it seems you might be getting out of your comfort zone doing so. If you do jump aboard next year too let me know and I'll tune in from the start, could maybe swap some inspiration along the way, didn't realize anyone was doing this in parallel this year, been too busy with my own...
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ineed i dont have the best english
it is kinda inposible to get in on the first try
but eventualy i get something decent
It's that Nachomix with the sickest dips! For the business kids with the richest bids! Who like beasts all feast on cold beats like this while they roll down streets smoking reef. Err.
Running out of tolerable rhymes with each one of these wallopings I find but: this is dope! :) Thanks for making this too!
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I haven't noticed the slightest decline in your sublime rhymes! Finish strong!
Thanks for the opportunity to work with you! I love what we've created here!
This is reaaaally good! Melancholy vibe, steady beat... big MGK fan too. Solid work with this.
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Gonna keep on making you proud homie.
Hmmm I like this too! These little strange and/or stupid things you make are pretty fun, always a new kind of vibe entirely... though the shaky beat thing reminds a bit of the last.
That love me vocal bit fits in so perfectly too. Huge mood booster. Or reducer. Them contrasts. Them ways it somehow comes across both lustful and joyful and all good things but at the same time cynical and lonely but also mysterious and just pretty exciting somehow...
Could be just perfect for Halloween type stuff, or y'know...
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my music has been so random these past years, havent been making as great stuff as i'd like to be. thanks for the review! :) <3 <3 <3
Aaand apparently I totally missed this whilst skimming through before. XD Interesting how different a take this artistry inspires... one of those beats that brings out things huh. Maybe. In whichever order it was made, music to text or vice versa. Complex lyricism too, impressive...
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I actually wrote the bulk of the lyrics two years or something like that ago and shaved them into shape onto the beat. Super flattered you liked the beat enough to drop a verse <3
I really like the vibe with this... the slow grow. Ambient and hopeful. Heartfelt and positive tones. Voices in the notes themselves. So relaxing... the structure might not be incredibly advanced but the layers work well together. Soothing...
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Thank you very much :33333 and yeah, it was kinda rushed, and I relied on a heavily progressive structure that was supposed to make it around 10 mins, but cut out on 3 mins
Quality of that first verse was on a whole new level! :D Syllable count and presentation and everything. Felt like the voice was a bit too up front/high at first, the kind of thing a mastering thing might fix, but recording quality sounds better too otherwise. Not too much reverb. Good tone.
Not a huge fan of the second chorus getting all slurred up, works better towards the end IMO, and the hooker accent's hmm... not totally authentic (maybe you could use some filters on the voice? Change the pitch?), but overall! Impressed! These are really getting better and better. Energy's great. Build's great. Length's just right. I like the grunge vibe. The instrumentation's not too flat or predictable. Switches good. I like that distant layer with higher tones, whatever you'd call that. Was thinking the strumming sound (the bass?) was a bit too noticeable in the beginning, and stumbled at one point, but that impression disappears when it all really starts up.
Trying to decide if I'd appreciate this more with less obscene lyrics but that's part of the image innit... did enjoy it.
Looking forward to whatever's up next.
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Yeah my timing was off with the bass because I cod barely hear it while recording. But I tried though, I coulda redid it. I actually prefer the second verse, the instrumental gets more progressive and stuff like that. The hooker's voice was supposed to sound fake as hell, to make the song sound stupider. But yeah, I could take my timing and vocal performance more into consideration.
I really like these long reviews! Gives me stuff to think about later.
thankyaw for reviewing! xoxo
You're the professional percussion glider Quarl! High sky survivor trier, deep diving flier with a mind for dubstep subgets!
The dubstep part of this really came in late, but I could listen to that piano all day, ambient in a strange and uplifting kind of way. Dig it. Solid beat too. Never mind a genre.
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Nice rhymes Devil. Those piano melodies are just major arpeggios I've been rolling up and down on my piano. G flat major arpeggio, then a half step down into an F major. Nothing fancy but basics have a timelessness that just sound right :D
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