I like the melody, and the oldskool VG style this has to it, but it feels the sounds are a bit sharp overall, especially at the start when there aren't any other layers backing them up. The melodic twist is nice though, and the background beat, and the peaks around :40. Towards the end, the sound kind of evolves from sharp to fuller, a nice strengthening transition even though I wish the beginning wasn't so cutting. It ends a bit abruptly, but I guess that's why it's WIP. Looking forward to the finished version!
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