Damn this gets good... it starts somewhat mediocre, but as the melody shifts, as the vocals kick in... I really get drawn into this. Love the mood beyond the melody, and the words are haunting. Great vocals. Maybe the not the crispest production quality, but it is a demo after all, it works well for this...
Also fades off way too quickly at the end but I guess that's a part of the demo thing too.
I wonder if it'd be possible to grab the listener's attention right off the bat. The brass does, when that section kicks in, but initially... could there be a way to have a more ominous cue right at the intro? Some stray note, some kind of build even before the first section there? It takes about half a minute before you REALLY start feeling it.
Anyway this was fantastic. Looking forward to hearing how it turns out in full. Feels like a timeless piece in the making already.
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