Sounds like an interesting comic idea! First thing that strikes me is how fluffy Ben's hair seems. Could be just the shape of his head of course, but it feels disproportionately large considering his face. Nice work on the characters otherwise, on the light and shadow, strong facial features, and even the stuble! Nice attention to detail! I like the grey/brown color scheme and somber setting too.
That 'Jeanette please come back to me!' text has some letters that seem to fade away more than others btw. Nice work! Is this a comic that'll be coming to NG too?
-cd-