Heeeey this wasn't bad! :D You kept the beat both with the rap and with the beatbox, annunciation and timing's on point, even gets a little melodic at the end there! Sorry I totally missed this last year, right after our collab too. You up for something this year too?
And it really was 5000 days ago huh... didn't take that bit seriously at first but that is actually 13,6 years right there. Fun idea.
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Thanks man :) Nowadays I kinda see this as a joke song but I appreciate the feedback. And I missed ya too bro. Glad to see you back on your feet now.
Such a dope beat. Sounds like Halloween, also sounds like a weight and a whole lot of feeling...
Love the mood. Love the energy.
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thank you thank you! hope all is well! :)
So atmospheric.
I can definitely hear the ocean in this, and a reverberating albeit slightly ominous openness, or emptiness, a vast expanse of something greater; concluding, consuming, alluding... though the further it goes it seems the more you get in tune with the pace and tone; settle in peacefully after all. A sense of death maybe not being so bad after all; floating in an empty space, in solace but not loneliness, in certainty and calm...
Holding hands with the void would've been an awesome album name too @CoolioShootyMane! :D So suitable too.
This was great. Looking forward to hearing how the whole album flows together; feels as a whole.
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Thanks so much CD! Indeed really looking forward to seeing what people think of the whole album; it's quite the journey! Thanks again for listening and only a few days until release time now!
Strawberries may be laced with poison? You mean pesticides?
I do think it's a good idea to proceed with caution, whatever situation you might be proceeding into, whether it has anything to do with winning or losing, but if you're hindered more so by doubt, or fear of failure, then it seems the poison may be your own mindset as to the outcome of said endeavor? To win you must believe you'll win, and you never fail if you keep on trying!
Though then again, if you believe you can jump from one roof to another one... maybe best assess the nature of the endeavor, and the probable outcome more so by qualification and experience than by will...
Well, winning is good. Winning implies succeeding. If the only thing that stands in your way is not so much an obstacle as yourself, or others, or both, then those strawberries are probably home grown; laced with nothing but water and freshness.
A little strange to hear you with a female voice here btw, doesn't seem like your persona! Sounds good but maybe not as personal.
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@CyberDevil
What I meant is that a win was actually a lose, meaning it was either not as good as it seemed originally, or other people turned it into a bad thing, or something unexpected/unrelated happened that ruined it.
I can provide a very sharp example.
Let's say you met the love of your life... in her apartment, a great thing, right? Two minutes later a meteor struck the building, killing both of you. If the good thing had not happened, you would have at least lived, and maybe she would as well, because she'd be outside of her apartment.
Let's say you brought your favorite food... turns out it came from diseased animals and you vomited shortly after consuming it from e-coli or something...
What else... you found a great career, but it prevented something in your life, such as time with family.
You got pregnant, but there was a miscarriage.
I can think up a million of these. It reminds me of the corrupt a wish thread a bit, although the actual wish may be a loss as well... you don't know what to expect, even if you are certain that it's something good.
edit: I felt my pm should be quoted here:
"To explain your questions: By poisoned strawberries I meant with cyanide, metaphorically, by someone or a group of people, not pesticides.
The second part... It does not refer to a specific situation. It's a way of thinking towards life... a lifestyle for lack of a better word."
It's got an air of crazy to it this one! I love the vibe, though sometimes feel I maybe wish it'd speed up a little and get properly chaotic. It does at the end a bit, but for the most part keeps a very steady and intentional pace. How would it be if it occasionally jumped a bit, or skipped a beat, mixed it up a little with the madness?
Dope work here though! I can definitely see this working well in a game...
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Ooooh yeah! You're right, I'll keep that in mind. =)
Thank you so much for such a detailed response! Glad you enjoyed the song!
The internet is indeed more regulated, though in the case of this I wonder if the reason it won't garner as many views as it once upon a time might have is also because there's just a lot more competition? And content forms. And little restriction on connection speed or access. With years worth of video material streaming into YouTube by the second... why would people seek out this speech, in particular? It's hard to be heard when the crowd is so deafening, and when there are more visually stimulating forms of media out there, and lastly: when this speech maybe doesn't appeal as much to the common stranger? Is this something the world wants to hear? What do they have to gain from it, more than you have to gain by sharing it?
I do appreciate your speeches, but honestly I'm not sure I'd seek out something like this. I'm not the one you speak to in your speech here; I don't feel like I gain a particular insight or entertainment either in this case, though it's nicely said.
Not sure all the ponderings leading up to it are relevant in this case either, it's almost like a legal disclosure. ;) A forewarning for what's to come. And I wonder what the title has to do with the content, or what values the United States has, and how it's relevant to not disclosing the name... there's a lot of leading up to and maybe not a lot of concluding with this one in particular. Feels a little incomplete I feel.
It's nice with an actual VA narrating this though! Good tone and recording, though volume jumps a bit, lines occasionally start off loud and get milder... then loud again.
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I sent you a pm, you said you are in some kind of contest or newgrounds post, requiring the review of adult material... so.
Though you'd think an audio titled 'Sex Stories' would involve more so actual sex than contemplations or observations thereof, voyeurism, worldly matters, travel, masturbation in a hotel room... this wasn't bad. It manages to have a semblance of a red thread all the way through, and concludes in a satisfying way... somewhat, though would probably have been even more satisfying if there had been some actual physical contact involving another person at some point in this. Or if you actually made that call. But then again it's refreshingly different with a more slice-of-life-like segment as it is. Simple, but intimate and revealing, and exotic. Far from home. It puts the element of sex in perspective a bit too with how it moves outside the expected and more predictable elements of the action itself, and more so to relations, sensations; culture.
I do feel the narrative drifts a bit sometimes, or that some things are said in a way where it isn't always easy to follow. For example lines like 'however that is not for discussion given plenty of circumstances' could probably be simpler and more direct. Also wonder if anyone doesn't know there are black people in France at this point, or anywhere else in the world... I realize I probably react to this particular bit since we live in a time of political correctness, and a sometimes too highlighted societal strife for equality and all, but it strikes me that I feel you shouldn't need to say you didn't care she was black at all, that in this time it should be obvious. Also don't think you need any 'Anyway,'s to bridge topics, better just move on naturally, with a pause or other wording. Typo at the end also with the 'starred'. Some bits of text could probably be polished a bit more. Some words seem to be missing occasionally.
I like the style of writing/narrating overall. The sometimes somewhat absurdist bits like "Anyway (again with the anyways though ;), I drank all four teas. She fell asleep. I laid down and then waved my hand in the air and said "Fine, If I'm in France I'll stay awake all night!" As if addressing God at this point"... it's spontaneous and stimulating that way, you don't know what to expect, thoughts and events flow together and make for a very visual kind of story in the end. Easy to imagine.
The mechanical voice maybe isn't ideal, and certain words get pronounced wrong with what I assume is the speech engine more so than the input, but it really isn't bad either. The tone's good.
I remember listening to one of these earlier too and I think I reacted more to it then. Maybe you get used to it. Would definitely be better with human narration if possible though!
This was an intriguing listen. Impressed and surprised you're really willing to share stuff like this too, feels like a vulnerable moment and memory in time, but do appreciate it.
Feels very different from the norm, and very human, mechanical voice or no.
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I removed some of the redundant "anyways" in the text.
I can explain why I wrote stared as starred. In an airport hotel... there are cameras, which I am aware of, so the whole thing is recorded by the French Government. :3
Edgy. :P But VA potential here too hmm... clean recording quality too.
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Thanks! I’m trying to make an album of songs about your mom, and the only recording “tools” I have is an Apple EarPods microphone and a copy of GarageBand for iOS. Strange how it came out decently, but I’m not complaining.
Well this was fun. XD Might feel a bit more professional if you have a script ready, and edit the audio a little after recording, cut out bits where you warm up and transition between voices, but overall it ain't bad! You've got potential. :) Hope you get some small roles for starters and keep improving! Finna be interesting to hear how far you've come in a few years.
Or months. Years maybe excessive. Potential fast improvement. :P
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Aw thanks bud
This was beautiful, and so much thought put into each of these stages too... impressive audio and impressive premise to build on, though for the larger portion (03:03 - 15:57) it's all very much the same. It's a nice sound; I do get a sense of brooding and heaviness, but it also seems almost excessively long compared to the other parts. If the intention is to move you through different stages, wouldn't it be better if they really moved from one to the other, preferably transitioned in a fluent way from one to the other, more so than have one main segment and shorter bursts of alternating tempo/style before and after?
Doesn't feel the most wholesome this way IMO, though I love the sound otherwise. The beginning in particular, with how it seems to melt or fade away somehow... seems to play with your mind somehow...
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Part of why aftermath is the longest is because out of all the tragedies that came and went between the 20th and 21st Century, Columbine was one of the hardest people tried to get over. Before Columbine, the thought of Teenage Revenge through murder was considered fictional. Heathers, Carrie. All those works practically warned us that something like Columbine was gonna happem and no one listened. Then you have the Aftermath. People barely able to comprehend murderers that age let alone ones that planned it out. Then to further tune that comprehension they look for someone or something to blame like Doom or Marylin Manson. Then Michael Moore exploits the tragedy for his contribution to Gun Control as if the weapon itself was to blame. Then just when things can't get any worse, school shootings break out all over North America. Virginia Tech and Sandy Hook being the most prominent. But no one talks about them as much because the second they make the news, reporters take us back to Columbine. "I haven't seen anything this horrible since Columbine." "Remember Columbine? That happened." And so on. Meaning literally 21 years and it's still fresh in their minds. Even South Park which not only takes place in Colorado, but who's creators were in said Moore Documentary, were telling everyone to just get over it. Even going so far as the kids and adult alike be so desensitized that only one person actually cared before giving up and joining the rest. So needless to say if it's gonna take people that long to get over something horrible then it needs to be pointed out.
Bamboo Shoots!
Age 34, Male
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5000 Days Ago 
something idk 
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Vestik - Tricky's Vengeance ft. MonoCronic 
My voice reel 2022 
Columbine Flower Through The Ages 
